Jan 13, 2012

Real Men Don't Smell Like Flowers


real men don't smell like flowers
they are twigs and leaves
kindling
the wind
soap
clean
cotton
fresh dug earth
broken in leather
and saltwater dried to the skin!

This poem is a "double fib," if you will. It uses 8, 5 3, 2 and 1 syllables (a reverse fib) followed by 1, 2, 3, 5 and 8 (a typical fib). Submitted to Jingle's Poetry Rally! Happy Rally!

I started this poem after I wrote the June 2011 haiku "Quit Using." I didn't realize at the time that I'd end up writing a love poem to men everywhere! I hope you enjoy.

8 comments:

Raven said...

This is very accurate ... and flows beautifully.

Brian Carlin said...

Natural and earthy, steering clear of the twee and floral, nice flow too.

Taylor Boomer said...

powerful expression.
Glad to see you in the rally.

:)

rch said...

Been workin' all morning, just took a whiff, no flowers here - good one!

Die Reise meines Leben said...

I enjoyed the clean shaving smell potrait! Keep up the haiku efforts!

Fay's Too said...

I couldn't agree more!

kez said...

cool think you captured him beautifully ...thank you x

Jingle Poetry At The Gooseberry Garden said...

love the title,
brilliant piece.

missed you a lot.

placed this poem in poetry picnic week 25, welcome submitting your entry to our collection today, best.

keep it up.