Oct 18, 2010

i see

Here's a double etheree (lines ascending from one to 10 syllables, and then descending from 10 to one) that I wrote for a wonderful prompt at Room for Romance. Also submitting this to Jingle Poetry's Poetry Potluck: Love and Romance.


i
see the
wind-burned doors
hastily locked
rust; holding away
this strange, soft velvety
thing that can only be love
though you keep it without water
it blossoms, unfurls nonetheless
to hope, perfume and resuscitate you;
That's the stuff of my succinct little dream
i see vulnerable, not rusty
i see hopeful youth and vigor
softness, not wind-hardened;
able, and willing to
be foolish again
grab gift of love
see that i'm
without
barbs.

13 comments:

Jingle said...

this is so fabulously romantic.
love your cute poem.

liv2write2day said...

I love this...first of all I enjoy etheree so much--fun to read and write. Beautiful rendition of the prompt.

Someone Is Special said...

Welcome to Room for Romance..

This is super romantic.. Lovely and cute rendition of the prompt.. I might consider this for Romantic Room

--Someone Is Special--

Bloggin'withAmanda said...

this is so awesome, sorry I missed it til now, I lost my blog been rebuilding. Christine this is a work of art!

Jingle said...

http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/10/23/6244/
Three awards for you, I value your participation at Jingle poetry during past weeks, hope to see you again tonight. Our theme is love and romance, have fun sharing! xxx

fiveloaf said...

nice poem.. :)

jessicasjapes said...

Being foolish - yes, that's what it's all about, isn't it? Certainly romance is, I believe. Couple who stay together for years never lose the ability to be 'foolish' and keep their love young.

Eric Alder said...

Nice double etheree - I may have to try that form.

I came for the Poetry Potluck... I Followed for the haiku.

Jingle said...

love this,
it is cool to reread it.

Sumit Sarkar said...

So romantic...
superb... :)

lukepraterswordsalad said...

Great poem. Love the form... have taken notes... I'm a form-freak...

Enjoyed this first visit to yr lovely blog

Regards

Luke @ WordSalad

(mine are here -
To Ashes: http://wp.me/pTeVg-ca
Let Me: http://wp.me/pTeVg-bW
Indigenous: http://wp.me/pTeVg-bK

Leo said...

I like the comparison that love is velvety! a beautiful double etheree!

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TALON said...

I see a beautiful poem :)